October 1, 2003

  • Grudge Fuck

    The space between my thumb and first finger,
    shoved against the space under your chin (It fits perfectly, just like we do).
    Thumb pressed against the soft spot (Right where it hurts),
    four fingers digging into tender jugular (How you like it).
    My front, your back, a half nelson.
    This is revenge I've pushed in, baby
    (And I plan to leave the thorns embedded).
    A fury so loud, its decibels turn to body heat.
    You've said your apologies so many times.
    Now I just want you screaming to God (And you do, you do, oh, oh yes, you do).
    I'll finish like a shotgun.
    I'll leave you motionless on the bed.

Comments (41)

  • yeah, daddy ...

  • hey, she took my comment!  ok, ok, kidding . . . mostly.  heh.  a grudge fuck, huh?  i think that's one i haven't tried yet.

  • at first I thought it said GRUNGE fuck...
    grudge fuck it is then!

  • that's right.

    i loved this.

  • who's your mutha fuckin daddy.

    loved this piece.

  • DAMN. Now Im all horny. Jebus Creeply, Richard...that. was. HOT.

  • I have to agree with Wrexie on that one... wow.

  • mmm hot but scary, part sex and part hurt

  • dude, you're makin' my mouth wata

  • Ok. So.  I'll go ahead and say it... It seems like most people who post on your xanga are incredible morons.  Wow, lets takes something serious and make it pathetic and immature... Oh.. what fun that is... YES, and lets miss the entire point he is trying to get across.... oh, fuck, thats even better.  Lets take something emotional and expressive, and turn it into the disgusting, unexpressive, shit we throw out! 

    I hate habitual comment givers.  If you aren't willing to read something and think about it in that little brain of yours... then don't post a damn comment for the hell of it.  It is a waste of space!  GRR!

    I find this disturbing.  I'll be the only one who says it doesn't make me horny, or that it is fucking awesome, or "this piece is good.." or some other thoughtless, over-used, generic comment... I prefer to actually think about what you are writing rather than throwing out my version of a witty sexual comment, that is in no means relevant to the point you are portraying.

    There is talent here... yes... but, it still disturbs me.

  • I'm speechless....wow...

  • first off, jen take a breath

    the piece was very moving, i liked how you built it, straight up to climax, very visual, *clickingfingers*

    keep up the good work

  • Aw, look...you've got your own little knight in shining armor!

    Methinks she needs to be a bit more familiar with the comments you leave on other's xangas before jumping on the heads of your loved ones like that, though.

    At the risk of raising poor Jen's ire once more, I have to admit this made me lustful...not because I prefer a forceful act to a tender one, but because you write it so well and I've had enough of both acts to know they each have their place.

    This conjured up make-up sex embarked upon long before the fight was truly over. This conjured up ex's I have slept with, simply because I could. This conjured up the sex I had Tuesday night.

  • Oh Richard...I cannot recall the last time I felt so very white, alone and dare I say it...prudish.

    I can't say that I enjoyed this piece as much as the others...I considered not leaving a comment so as to not detract...but I did, however, want you to know that I was here & took the time to read.

    Timothy (The actual moron of the crowd jen)

  • Dude, I can see it, hear it, and FEEL it.

    H-O-T.

  • Hey, that time that you used me for meaningless but monumentally gratifying sex, did I leave my vinyl thong under your bed? 'Cause I really need it back.

    BWAHAHAHAHA.

    (check yer email, dude. I sent you some super-evil linkage.)

  • I've been fucking mad like that and used sex......'cept...I'm a girl...so it was a litlte reversed....but I was still pissed and using that fucker.

    ^v^

  • I'm turned on.

  • finish like a shotgun.

    oh yeah motherfucker.  yeah.

  • You don't know me at all, so I hope it's not weird that I'm commenting, but I saw your site on the xanga homepage, and clicked the link for the sake of clicking it...well, I must say, it was powerful. I could taste your anger. Quite intense. As an aspiring writer, I learned something from it.

    -Liz

  • Pull the stick out of your ass Jen!

  • browsin propz!!

  •     Now you are getting way too creepy.

        Oh yeah, everyone make fun of Jen because she didn't compliment this sick piece of writing. Anger against women really should be praised, instead. Anything to be cool, huh?

       

  • http://www.grc.nasa.gov/WWW/K-12/airplane/dragco.html

    on reddirtgirl

  • oops i mean too old for this

  • i dont get it... can someone explain this poem for me?

  • Oh my... ummm... oh my oh my

    *starts breathing again*

  • whee trippy i love it. and feminists, i agree a hundred percent with your message, but you have to understand where we're coming from which is the standpoint that excess violence and destruction, IN FICTION, is awesome.

    and yeah i'm a random person i just saw your site on the homepage and thought why not? and glad i did.

  • hmm. well, sweetie, you've definitely stirred up a reaction with this ... all KINDS of reactions.

  • *wipes the sweat off her brow and takes a deep gulp*  Very well written (poetically/expression wise) - and ..... grudge fuck, now you're talking! lol. Day'am Rich - yummy? lol Granted, you're angry, frustrated and have "had it" - I know that - but still... the entire concept of a grudge fuck is well - skin shivering .

    Thank you for your comment about my job Rich (((hugs))). And the reason you didn't get emailed back, is bc I'd been holding my breath since last night (when I heard about the job) - and while not breathing, I was also not speaking/typing, etc.

    Kimberly

  • I just had to come back and read this again.

    Then I read the comments and remembered I'm a feminist.

    I think it's even better this time around.

  • *scared*

     

  • As a writer, I'm here to move you, to make you think, to make you consider. If something I've written has left you lusty, creeped out, disturbed, sad...I've accomplished what I've set out to do, end of story. If a piece of fiction leaves you defensive, angered and caustic - even fucking better, I say. I don't write to be dismissed or viewed with indifference. I write to move and to incite.
    If a piece I've written does nothing for you, sorry. I'm not the perfect writer. I can only write what I can. There's always the next piece and hopefully that one will move you. Or maybe the next one.

  • Detailed yet simple. The emotions strongly portrayed. Anger and desire. I see the mess of the aftermath and need to take a shower because of it.

  • Thanx for your comment.

    The font on my banner is called Sabotage

    \Mary

  • omg.  How did I miss this before?  *drool*

  • i found that disturbing. but thats the point. well written.

  • You've gotten enough kudos but I shall add mine anyway.  Thank you for filling my midday with sexual tension.  Orgasms are often cast as death for the individual experiencing them, but as murder of your partner is an unusual image.  Perhaps one not possible for a women - unless she is a succubus. I would love to see your take on that perspective.

  • Love your form, and love to see this topic tackled by a man.
    Now I need me some tacklin'

  • brutal and violent and very well written!!

    it.

  • Good writing is meant to garner a reaction, be it good or bad, horney, mad at the author...whatever. It automatically gets a reaction...voluntary or involuntary (damn good writing gets an involuntary reaction).

    I would say you have done all of the above.

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