August 17, 2003
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A flash of recognition passed from her eyes to mine when she walked through the door, then towards my car. I sat, watching and paused the radio. Arbitrary words, "Hey, what's up?", at first.
Black curly hair pulled back tight, exposing the cut on her forehead she'd gotten boogie boarding. Olive skin (like mine) and brown eyes (like mine), she spoke with lilted cream soda-sweetness.
Then the meat of the matter:
She scribbled on the scrap of paper, smiling.
A sun shower pit pit spattered its way into our conversation, darker dots on her dark shirt and the smug, oily smell of water on too hot asphalt. We parted ways with a call promised, plans unmade.
Comments (22)
You described the atmosphere nicely. I look forward to reading the follow-up to this entry.
good. so good. i could almost taste her voice.
yes, I really liked "lilted cream soda-sweetness". Quite a vivid picture of her.
So...what's Panteleimon gonna say when she learns of this?!?!?!
I'm hoping she scribbled a number on the paper, and not something along the lines of, "Leave me alone, you sick bastard."
Yeah, Panty is going to be pissed.
You did it, YOU DID IT!
I'm so proud. And what a description!
But where did you do it?
I'm giving ya two more cause I liked it so much.
umm..what's this story about? i'm lost..
I need to know the rest of this story! tell us what happened!
EC
Oooh, exciting! Love it!
Wow...that's good...it's in a style I'm not too familiar with...but yeah very nice...please could you write some more...?
- MTL
Yum.
And yum to virgilmvx's comment, too...for having written my very thoughts.
Gotta love them scars.
I feel like I'm watching it... Wow...
So you want to date someone who looks like you? Hmm, I wonder what that means?
Beautifully written. Perfect description. Her voice is music to my ears....
dude I want to hump her.
Hey just want to say that your xanga is awesome, very entertaining. I like your previous entry about how it doesn't matter what you right, as long as you are satisfied with it. It should be about you and whatever you want to write and the people will like the xanga for what it is and if they don't then they can just stop reading!! Look forward to reading more from your cool xanga!
hey i'm going to add you, oh yeah, you have a nice way of putting the best things in life. (o:
props. o.O
Now, that is what I call writing. Man, that is awesome!! It truly is. If you were to write a book with that style (which I just gotta love) I would definitely have to buy it. Keep on with your writing man, it's great. I can taste that girl-- sweet man. I might onlt be a high school student, but your writing is definitely the type of writing I would read. Hope to for more. Ciao, WRITE MORE!!!!
ahh rich....you have such a lovely heart.....
i agree with everybody else!
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